第一节 短文改错（10分） 第二节 书面表达（25分） (如何找到有效的增分点？)
1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确 定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确 定或调整档次，最后给分。 3.词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去 2分。 4. 评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点，
5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。 评分时，应视其对交际影响的程度予以考虑。英， 美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。 6. 如书写较差以至影响交际，将其分数降 低一个档次。 7. 语言首先要求准确通顺。 8. 鼓励写出新颖词汇，顺畅连接和复杂结构。
假设你是育才中学学生会主席李华 (1)，你校将 举办一次英语演讲比赛（speech contest）, 希 望附近某大学的外籍教师Smith女士来做评委(2) 。 请参照以下比赛通知给她写一封信。 英语演讲比赛 主题：人与自然 (5) 时间：6月15日下午2:00-5:00 (3) 地点：501教室 参赛选手：10名学生 (4) 联系人：李华（电话：44876655） (6) 欢迎大家光临 注意：词数100左右
One possible Version Dear Ms.Smith,
I'm Li Hua, Chair of the student Union
of Yucai Middle School, which is close to
your university. I’m writing to invite you to
be a judge at our English speech contest to be held in our school on June 15.
2010年新课标全国卷—书面表达 It will start at 2:00 pm and last for about three hours. Ten students will deliver their 发表他们的演说 speeches on the given topic “Man and Nature”. We hope that you will accept our invitation if it is convenient for you. 如果你方便的话 Please call me at 448876655 if you have any questions. I am looking forward to your reply. With best wishes Li Hua
假定你是李华，正在一所英国学校学习暑期课程， (1) 遇到一些困难，希望得到学校辅导中心 （Learning Center）的帮助 (2)。根据学校规定， 你需书面预约，请按下列要点写一封信： 内容主要包括： 1. 本人简介；2. 求助内容；(3) 3. 约定时间;(4) 4. 你的联系方式 (5) （Email:firstname.lastname@example.org;Phone:12345678）。 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 结束语已为你写好。
One possible Version Dear Ms.Smith,
I'm Li Hua, a Chinese student taking summer courses in your university. I'm
writing to ask for help. I came here last month
and found my courses interesting. But I have some difficulties with note-taking and I have no idea of how to use the library.
2011年新课标全国卷—书面表达 I was told the Learning Center provides 提供帮助 help for students and I‘m anxious to get help from you. I have no class on Tuesday mornings and Friday afternoons. Please let me know which day is OK with you. You may email or phone me. Here are my email address and phone number:lihua@1236. com;12345678. Looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua
假定你是李华(1)，从互联网上得知一个国际中 (2) 学生组织将在新加坡（Singapore）举办夏令营， 欢迎各国学生参加(3) 。请写一封电子邮件申 请参加。 内容主要包括： 1. 自我介绍（包括英语能力) (4) 2. 参加意图（介绍中国） (4) 3. 希望获准。(5) 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 邮件开头和结尾已为你写好。
One Possible Version Dear Sir or Madam,
I'm Li Hua, a middle school student from 来自中国的一名中学生。 read the announcement of the China. I 看到 通告，告示 summer camp that you have posted on the 发布 Internet and I am interested in it. I know that you welcome students from different countries and I'd like to take part in it. I've been learning English for 10 years, and I speak fluent English.
What is more , I'll be able to tell students 此外 from other countries about China and learn about their countries as well. I hope I will be accepted as a member of your summer 被接受成为 camp. Looking forward to your reply. Regards, Li Hua
近几年来，在新课标试卷中，书面表 达趋向于提纲式作文，但是这些提纲 只给出了大致的写作方向，没有限制 具体内容，属于半开放式的提示；考 查应用中的书信，话题与中学生的学 习生活密切相关，考生会觉得有话可 说，有利于考生的自由发挥。
What is a good writing？ How to catch the experts' eye?
A good composition
be attractive, completed in a limited time!
What is a good writing？ Content: everything needed included which is related to your view.(内容要完整) （内容要点一个也不能丢，如果人家给的是文字 提示，可以用笔在试题处标出1,2,3,4，如果人 家给的是图，那要先看懂图的意思，六个图都 要看看再动笔，不要看了一个马上就写。）
What is a good writing？
Structure: * Good beginning and ending(好的开头结尾) * Well organized and smoothly developed (结构合理,行文流畅) Language: * No Chinglish (避免中文式英文) * No Grammatical mistakes (没有语法错误) * With exactly used words and relatively changed sentence patterns (词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化)
How to write a good composition？
1)Use proper linking words
第二节 书面表达（满分25分）? 假定你是某中学的学生李华。请用英语给出版社的 编辑写一封信，表达你对现在使用的英语材料的看 法，内容主要包括： 优点：? 1. 话题广泛；? 2. 图片丰富；3.有助于提高 学习兴趣。 建议：适当降低词汇难度。 注意：1. 词数100左右；? 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使用文连贯；? 3. 开头语已你写好，不计入总词数。
使用恰当的连接词 Use proper linking words
Dear Editor, As a student reader, I am writing to talk about the English textbooks published by your house. To begin with These books have many advantages._________ One of them is that we can find a variety of topics, such as science, culture and history. These topics, I think, are very popular with us students.
As a result; To begin with ;
In addition ; However
_____________, along with the texts there are what's more many beautiful and colorful pictures, which can help us understand English better. Even the students who used to dislike English have turned out to be interested in the subject. _________, some of the texts have too many However new words and expressions which are hard for Therefore us. __________, I'd like to suggest changing them into easier ones.
In my opinion; However;
Therefore; what's more
Avoid Chinglish! 1) Traffic in Shanghai is too crowded. heavy. 2) There has a highway connected with is Beijing. 3) Though she's almost 40，but she still plans to compete. 4) I forgot my dictionary at home. left 5) It will take us much money to buy one. cost
I can't understand them when I meet new words, so I have to refer to them in the dictionary.
The ability to read English passages is slowly.
There is no doubt that English Study need lots learning of time and efforts. Only by this way, can we keep up with other in students. I'm LiHua, a new student of you. yours Li Hua
My English level is common and I can't speak very well.
I believe we can get alone well with each other.
Besides, I think speaking English is as important as writing English. spoken
I study English for 12 years so I think I know English
very well. There are some advice in teaching English.
Adopt a variety of sentence patterns
1. They even threw rubbish into the lake. They totally ignored the noticeable sign "No littering" nearby. (使用V-ing形式)
They even threw rubbish into the lake, totally ignoring _____________ the noticeable sign "No littering" nearby.(12 福建)
Adopt a variety of sentence patterns
2. Not long ago I won the first prize in the English contest. It was held in our school. (使用过去分词)
Not long ago I won the first prize in the held English contest_______in our school.(12 山东)
3. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things. (使用名词性从句) What surprises him is that ___________________________ the little girl knows so many things. 4. People suggest that the conference be put off. (改被动语态) It is suggested that ___________________the be put off.
5. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper. ( 使用强调句型)
It was not until _______________he had read the news in the
newspaper _____ he knew what had happened. that
6. I passed the physics exam because of your help. (用虚拟语气） _______________________the physics exam I couldn’t have passed _________________your help. but for/without
7. I won’t believe what he says. (使用状语 从句) No matter what/Whatever _______________________________he says, I won’t believe. 8. The girl is spoken highly of. Her composition was well written. (用定语从句)
The girl______________________________ whose composition was well written is spoken highly of.
9. If you study hard, you will make rapid progress. （用并列句）
Study hard,and you’ll _______________________make rapid
10. He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. (使用倒装 句) ______________he come back from No sooner had Beijing ______he was sent abroad. than Hardly/scarcely ... when...
Please learn to
when you finish it from now.
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项目 自评 他评 1.书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划? 2.句子开头注意大小写了吗? 3.有没有注意标点符号? 4将文章分段了吗?分成了几段? 5有单词拼写错误吗?几个? 6.有时态错误吗?误用了哪种时态? 7.注意主谓一致了吗? 8.有没有语态的错误? 9.有没有使用关联词?使用得当吗? 10.有没有词性的错误?哪一种? 11.简单句表达正确吗? 12.是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构? 13.表达方式是否多样化?注意长短句搭配了吗? 14.有没有用好词好句?用了哪些?
Have a happy day!
first of all ,to begin with, to start with , in the first place
in addition, besides, furthermore, moreover, on the other hand
finally, eventually, in general, in a word, in short, on the whole, to sum up, last but not least
therefore, thus, hence, consequently, since, as, because, because of, on account of ,
as a result /consequence of
due to, owing to, thanks to
however, but, nevertheless,
on the contrary, on the other hand
Bats are long—lived creatures, some having ________a life span of 20 years. Bats are long—lived creatures, some _____________a life span of 20 years. of which have Bats are long—lived creatures. Some _____________a life span of 20 years. of them have