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Assessment & practice of Writing

? 2008年奥运会刚刚落幕,一家英文报刊在其网站上 征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议。假设 你叫李华,是该报的一名读者,请给该报编辑部写 一封信,谈谈你的建议和理由. 内容包括: ? 1.向公众开放,用于健身 ? 2.租给体育公司,创造经济效益 ? 3.开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客. ? 4.……… ? Dear editor, ? I am Li Hua, a reader of your paper. ? ………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………

内容
语法 框架---组织结构 思想

要点全,拓展有度,有效

准确,复杂语法结构, 高级词汇,多种句型
连接词,作文结构紧 凑;流畅

开放能引起读者的共鸣,灵魂

1.单词拼写或用错:
Give you some advise advice

I just provide you my own suggests.
suggestion

They can attact visitors.
attract

2.时态语态问题 We may given it to the PE company. We may give it to the PE company.. 3. 主谓一致问题
The sport stadiums is very great and is highly spoken of by the foreigners. The sport stadiums are very great and are highly spoken of by the foreigners.

4. 逐字翻译问题 The stadiums can open to people for do exercise use. The stadiums can be opened to people for doing exercises.

5. 词性混淆问题 It can creative money.. It can create/bring in money. Many people can use them to strong our body. Many people can use them to strengthen our body. 6. 介词短语的运用问题 I am writing to make some advice for how to make full use of the sports stadium. I am writing to make some advice on how to make full use of the sports stadium.

7.句子结构不完整 Only make full use of them does it make sense . Only by making full use of them does it make sense The 29th Olympic Games which hosted in Beijing were held successfully. The 29th Olympic Games which were hosted in Beijing were held successfully.

体裁 1. 审题 时态 结构 要求 2. 列提纲/要点 3.连词成句

字数 内容

4.连句成篇
5. 润色修正 6. 定稿

体裁 书信格式 人称 第一,三人称 时态 一般现在时 要求 字数 抓要点, 120个左右
内容
Para.1 开头 信息1
①08年奥运会刚刚落幕. ②征集奥运会后如何综合利

用体育场馆的建议. ③你想写一些建议.

Para.2 正文 信息2 向公众开放,用于健身

结构

信息3

租给体育公司,创造经济效益

信息4 开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客
Para.3 结尾 信息5 总结,意愿……

①08年奥运会刚刚落幕. ② 征集奥运会后如何综 信息1 合利用体育场馆的建议. ①08年奥运会刚刚落幕. ③你想写一些建议.
开头
The . 2008 Beijing Olympic/ were over/finished/held successfully in Beijing.

②征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.

Collect some advice How to use/make use of /make the best of the stadium After the Olympic Games After Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .

③你想写一些建议

Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some advice

Contribute some suggestions to you.

信息2 向公众开放,用于健身 正 信息3 租给体育公司,创造经济效益 文 信息4 开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客 ①向公众开放,用于健身.
Open/be opened to the people/public/open them to . public. Be used for/as; be made to; ②租给体育公司,创造经济效益 . Do some exercise/build our bodies/strengthen our Give …to/Rent…to/be rented to bodies

Sport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matches Make/ create money; bring in money/make more profits ③开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客
Use it as/be used for/as; take it as; open it for Places of interest/tourist attractions Attract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors

结尾 信息5 总结,意愿……

In my opinion/ as far as I am concerned../from my point of view

I. would appreciate… I would you will think of /take…into consideration….

①The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing ① Olympic Games were with a2008 greatBeijing success. .The over/finished. Beijing achieved its dream of hosting the 29th The 29th Olympic Games were held successfully in Olympic Games successfully. Beijing. ② are collecting some advice on how to make use of the Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games with a great success. ②You Collect some advice stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games How to use/make use of /make the best of the . I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best stadiums. of the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games After the Olympic Games successfully. After Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games . ③ to write some ③Want I would like to give youadvice/Would some advice. like to give you some advice I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you Contribute some suggestions to you.

①08年奥运会刚刚落幕. 信息1 ②征集奥运会后如何综 合利用体育场馆的建议. ③你想写一些建议. 开头

信息2 向公众开放,用于健身 正 信息3 租给体育公司,创造经济效益 文 信息4 开辟成旅游景点,吸引游客
2.Open/be opened to be theopened people/public/open them to public. 2.The stadiums can to the public. Be used for/as; be made to; The public can build their their bodies Do some exercise/build our bodies/strengthen body/strengthen our bodies

3.Give …to/Rent…to/be rented to

Sport which matches/organizing 3.The company/companies stadiums can be rented to organize sport company which matches organize matches. Make/create money; bring in money/make more profits

It can bring in more money/make more profits

4.They can be used as tourist attraction. 4.Use it as/be used for/as;take it as;open it for

Places of interests/tourist attractions It can attract many visitors. Attract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors

结尾 信息5 总结,意愿……

In my opinion/ as far as I we am should concerned../from my point of view From my point of view, do what we can to make

. I would appreciate… full use of the stadium. I you will think of /take…into consideration…. I would would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep consideration In a word…

Para.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in more money/make more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. Para.3: From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep consideration

Para.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.

Para.1: I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.

In Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to addition, the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to Besides, First of all sport company which organize matches. It can bring in Moreover, Firstly, much more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. What’s more To begin with, It can attract many visitors.
Para.2: First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.

Finally, What’s worse,

使用恰当的连接词

逻辑角度
⑴排序关系 ⑵并列关系 ⑶举例关系

合适的过渡性词汇
first; firstly; second; secondly; last but not least
and; too; as well as; along with; together with for example; for instance; like; such as; as to but; however; while; though; on the contrary because; since; thanks to; as a result /consequence (of); thus; therefore in a word; in short; to sum up; in conclusion what’s more; besides; to make matters worse; what’s worse; worse still; furthermore

⑷转折关系
⑸因果关系 ⑹归纳总结 ⑺递进关系

I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration

一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力
二. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档 三. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力 四.尝试多 样化表达方 式 ①强调句 ②With短语复合结构 ③定语从句 ④名词性从句(主宾表同从句) ⑤各种状语从句 ⑥被动语态

一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力 1. Many people want to visit the stadium .
Many people are dying to visit the stadium.

2. The stadium is useful.
The stadium is of great value.

二. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档
? 1.The 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended. It left many stadiums unused The 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended, leaving many stadiums unused.

三. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力
? 1.we can let stadium make sense Only when we make full use of the stadium Only when we make full use of the stadium can we let stadium make sense. ? 2. The stadiums can be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits. they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit. Not only can the stadiums be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits, but also they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit.

①强调句

四. 尝试多样化表达方式

? We should take the Olympic stadiums into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully. It is the Olympic stadiums that we should take into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully.

②With短语复合结构

? The 29th Olympic Games were ended successfully. we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives.

四. 尝试多样化表达方式 ③定语从句

You can open them for the public. The stadiums can be used to take exercise. You can open the stadiums which can be used to take exercise for the public.

④各种状语从句
我们锻炼的越多,我们就越健康。 The more exercises we take, the healthier we will become.

⑤被动语态
We should pay more attention to the stadiums. More attention should be paid to the stadiums.

I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration

高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求
第五档(21-25分) 完全完成了试题规定的任务: ?准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容,要点无遗漏 ?应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 ?语法结构和词汇有少许错误,但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式 所致;具备较强的语言应用能力 ?有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑 完全达到了预期的写作目的。
第四档(16-20分) 完成了试题规定的任务: ?比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容 ?应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 ?语法结构和词汇应用基本准确,少许错误主要是因为尝试较复 杂语言结构或词汇所致 ?应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的 写作目的。

With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, What we should do now is how to make full use of the stadiums. I heard you are dying for some advice on how to make the best of them. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public, where they can strengthen their bodies conveniently. Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport companies which organize matches, thus bringing in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. Because many of them are so well designed with strong Chinese features that they will surely be attractions for visitors from all over the world. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use of the stadiums. Only when we take actions can we bring a bright future to their value. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into

Homework
学校英语社征稿,请同学们就校园清洁清洁问题 和校园环境发表看法,并提出建议, 包括如下内容: 美好环境让人感到舒适,心情愉快,从而提 高效率(efficiency); 就校园做清洁和保洁提两点建议; 就美化校园提两点建议。 词数:120个左右。 注意:题目已为你写出,不计入总词数。
Better schoolyard contributes to a better school life


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